To be honest,I don't like Moneday at all. Because Monday it means that the end of a vacation.And I need to get up every early.Besides, I have full schedule of classes on Monday this semester.All above are the reasons why I don't like Monday. Today, one of my best friend was in a bad mood.She told me that one of her relatives was passed away.I felt sorry about the thing she told me.All I could do was just stay with her and comfort her.
Anyway today is really a blue Monday not only for me but also for my friend.
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"To be honest,I don't like Moneday at all. Because Monday it means that the end of a vacation.And I need to get up every early.Besides, I have full schedule of classes on Monday this semester." This is very sloppy writing. I said the blog should be informal, not messy and slapdash (i.e., slap the words onto the page and then dash away without looking at the mess you've made).
"To be honest,I don't like Monday at all, because Monday means the end of the weekend and that I need to get up every early. Besides that, I have a full schedule of classes on Monday this semester."
You don't need the next sentence. All it tells us is what is already obvious. The sentence is redundant and, therefore, verbose.
one of her relatives was passed away." ==> "one of her relatives had passed away."
"I felt sorry about the thing she told me." Terribly verbose and unnatural.
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"I felt sorry for her (loss)" is one way of saying this. It's always hard to talk about death, even when the person who has died is not a friend or a member of your own family. Americans in particular don't like to talk about death. That's why we, as a people (not necessarily as individuals) want everyone to live forever and ever, even if that means plugging people who are brain-dead into a wall and letting them vegetate for 50 years. Americans also don't mind spending inordinate amounts of money keeping alive people who should be allowed to die in peace. These, of course, are just my personal opinions and not the way most people think and feel, but I'm not most people, and neither are you, and neither is anyone else. The concept "most people" is just a statistical concept. It does not correspond to a real person. It's like saying "the average Taiwanese": there is no such person.
You also have to make sure that you add a space after every period.
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