2007年11月4日 星期日
Today I woke up very early although it is Sunday.Maybe it is a little weird for me.Because I ued to be a sleepyhead on holidays. After I washing and dressing up,I decided to took my dog"Lumi" for a walk and exercise.Because Lumi is a little fat. The veterinarian suggested me to help Lumi lose weight or Lumi may get heart illness.So I took Lumi to a park in my neighborhood.The morning air was quite fresh. And some people I met there were friendly and polite.Even we don't know each other, they still said hello to me.Lumi and I had a great sunday morning in park. Maybe I could take Lumi to park next Sunday morning if I don't laze around my bed.
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"Maybe it is a little weird for me.Because I ued to be a sleepyhead on holidays." How many times do I have to point this grammatical mistake out? Never make the reason a separate sentence that begins with "Because". The reason belongs with the result either as "Maybe it is a little weird for me because I used to be a sleepyhead on holidays" or as "Because I used to be a sleepyhead on holidays, maybe it is a little weird for me".
And you've done it again in the next couple of sentences, only this one is worse: "After I washing and dressing up,I decided to took my dog Lumi[Never put quotation marks around a name unless it is a strange nickname; names given to gangsters are okay, e.g., John "Fathead" Gotti and Roger "The Wrench" Ripper. These quotation marks tell us that the words between them are not the person's real name but a nickname] for a walk and exercise.Because Lumi is a little fat. The veterinarian suggested me to help Lumi lose weight or Lumi may get heart illness." This example is worse than the first because it's possible for the dependent clause that begins with "Because" to be attached to the sentence before it as well as to the sentence after it.
I don't care that this is an informal blog. Writing like this is a bad habit. You've already got the habit, so now it's time to break it by being aware of it and rewriting all such sentences.
"I decided to took my dog". You need to read a grammar book about tense. Infinitives are always in the present tense and never, never, ever in the past: "to take".
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